[X] My Assistant

[Protoman]

Getting lazy is my ultimate downfall, and as such, I've decided to give A Day in the Life a much more in-depth review.

From the beginning to the end of this story, I felt as if I was around them each step of the way, almost like a cameraman filming his Oscar Winning film, but with more danger surrounding me than in real life. With the new group of thugs in the air, I didn't expect them to leave such a bad impression, with forgetting their code names and turning on their teammates(I half expected them to be organized, but their just a bunch of thugs ). With the two robbery attempts and the kidnapping at the end, I was on the edge of my seatbed in suspense til I reached the bottom of the page. The conversations all the characters had, whether with each other or with an outside source, were both very interesting and comical. In short, everything was so fluent that it was damn near impossible to see any mistakes minus minor ones.

And now for the points.

Man oh man, did Jay have me both laughing and ready for him to just show his darker demeanor. At first, I thought Jay was just going to be someone focused mainly on the mission, but instead, he did quite the opposite (well he did a lot of both). The dancing scene that Jay and Sagira shared made me think about So You Think You Can Dance after reading that they were doing the Viennese Waltz, making it easier to picture the whole thing in my mind. Not only that, but the battles Jay and his Pokemon faced were stupendous. I honestly can't wait to see what Jay will do now that Sagira has been captured, but it's not that hard to imagine possibilities. Nice job! Oh and 175 Faction Experience as well.

Without a doubt, it is amazing each time I read her actions or reactions within different enviroments. Sagira's discontentment with their boss also was enjoyable to read. I clicked on the ringtones she had placed for both Jay and their boss and I thought they were fitting in this situation(I almost died of laughter at the Denis Leary song). Not at all surprising, Sagira maintained her composure, minus the part with the wall being missing between her and Jay's room. Her battles were just as fluent as Jay's, if not more so in some ways. Her capture at the end made me feel like drop kicking the crap out of the pair responsible for it. I hope she will be okay in the end. 175 Faction Experience and great work!

Throughout the entire RP, Ivy reminded me of two anime character that I'll never stop liking. The first was Aisha Clanclan from Outlaw Star, making me see Ivy with her eyes fixed widely on food. I could also picture Ivy tinkering with her phone, trying to type a text message to the *ahem* Serviceproviderman she had been thinking about the whole RP. XD The other anime character who I thought about was Vegeta from Dragon Ball Z, with his determination being the fuel for his training. I saw this come out at full force at the end when, even with injuries, Ivy pushed herself by exercising to get stronger. Compared to the latter, Ivy has a much sunnier disposition. Not only that, but she did it for her friends' sake, not her own. All in all, amazing job. 175 Faction Experience rewarded.

Reason for edit: Got lazy yesterday, sorry.

[Kamaitachi]

WHAT THE HECK!? Hottest Vacation Ever! is all kinds of finally complete.

Operatives Fielded:
MAGMA:
Dusk Reanne - - Progress Tracking
Kanoa Kaipo - - Progress Tracking
Megan Scarlett - Progress Tracking (She disappeared!)

REBELLION:
Kishk Akrias - - Progress Tracking
Daniel Reeves - Progress Tracking (Gonesies!)
Rachel Lore - - Progress Tracking

Mission Overview:
Rebellion Members Kishk Akrias and Daniel Reeves set out to the resort to meet Rachel Lore, a Rebellion Initiate who's going to learn the ropes of being an agent.

Meanwhile, acting on some information, Magma launches something of a terror campaign, sending Expendables Kanoa Kaipo, Dusk Reanne and Megan Scarlett. This is the first mission for the latter two.

-Everyone arrives at the resort
-Dusk catches a Lapras
-Scuba diving happens.
-Rachel lets slip that they're rebellion
-Kanoa and Dusk spring an ambush on Rachel, but purposefully do a poor job of it, allowing her to escape.

Yay.

[Amissa]

Thanks so much for being patient everyone. I wrote about my computer troubles in the Member's Clubhouse, and I'm extremely sorry that it has taken me so long to complete this grading. At long last, here it is!

I loved reading this rp. It was really great to see everyone just running around and having a great time. Unfortunately, it couldn't all be fun and games. Eventually, there was some hard and painful work to be done. I enjoyed the carefree comedy in this rp, and I also appreciated the bits of poignant backstory from characters when those came out. The characters made some lasting friendships, and it's too bad that some of them may not have a chance to grow as well due to opposing factions.

One reminder that I'd like to give to everyone is that in a roleplay, you should write as if you are telling a story. Assume that I haven't read your profile, and I don't know what your character looks like, how they got there, or what pokemon they have. The hardest part is keeping track of everyone's pokemon, since there are sometimes lots of pokemon mentioned by name in a single post and I can't remember which pokemon goes to what name or to what character. It may help if when starting an rp, the first time that you mention your pokemon's name, you tell what pokemon it is and maybe a bit about it.

I felt like there was much more chemistry with the rebellion group, but I'm a bit surprised that Daniel didn't ever feel like the third wheel. He always seemed perfectly tolerant of watching Rachel and Kishk flirt with one another. The magma group didn't get along as well, but I found the conflict between Megan and Dusk interesting. I was especially sad to see Mosica go since Megan was the only Magma who actually thought Team Magma was worth working for. I thought that Rachel and Dusk's discovery at the end was really awkward and rushed. They were friends from some long ago time that was never mentioned in the whole rp but was suddenly really important. I understand that they probably couldn't recognize each other earlier because of the scuba gear, but maybe try some foreshadowing next time.

Participation: 2/3 You dropped out near the end.
Skill: 7/7 Your posts were very good. You made good use of description and details while keeping your character interesting and believable. There were many posts where you set up the entire scene that the other characters explored.
Battle: 0/5 There was only one real pokemon battle in this rp, and you weren't there for it. The encounter with the huntail didn't really count, though it could have made for an interesting battle if you'd wanted.
Total: 9/15
Other notes: I love reading your posts, Teen Sensation, and I hope to see more of you and your awesome shuppet in the future.
Rank Points: 75 Your mission was to train Rachel Lore, which should have been easy. Rachel got some training and experience all right, but Kishk didn't help much. He did however, tell her about his own motives for joining the rebellion. Even though he may have been embarrassed to reveal that level of emotion, I think that was the best way to teach Rachel what the rebellion is all about and why they are fighting. Kishk was also a punching bag while Rachel practiced her fighting skills by beating him with a pokemon (Okay, this one doesn't actually count, but it was funny anyway.)

Participation: 3/3 Hurray, you stayed until the end of the rp!
Skill: 7/7 Your posts were also full of interesting details, and Kanoa was an abundantly fun character. There were many times when your posts had me laughing out loud. When it was revealed that he was gay, I could hear the despairing wails of disappointed girls everywhere.
Battle: 1/5 The battle at the end wasn't much. Your zubat only used two weak attacks before it was all over. If I could give Kanoa points for bad acting instead, you'd get a 5.
Total: 11/15
Other notes: I feel like Kanoa's heading towards some serious problems in the future, what with working for a faction that he doesn't seem to care for. I'm interested to see how he eventually resolves this conflict between his feelings and his work.
Rank Points: 125 Your mission was to hunt down and attack any Rebel or Aqua members at the Bungalow. You found and battled Rachel, fulfilling the mission as far as your superiors know. You didn't work terribly hard at it, and you only found her because she accidentally revealed herself.

Participation: 3/3 You stayed for the whole RP!
Skill: 7/7 I was quite impressed. You even taught me a new word "defenestrated". Your posts had good detail and length. Her mistake in her mission seemed realistically noobish for first rebel mission. She had to handle all the drama at the end without Daniel or Kishk to back her up, but the emotions and actions were all well communicated.
Battle: 1/5 There was a battle, but it was short. There was much more human drama than pokemon fighting.
Total: 11/15
Other notes: I didn't take away points for it because it was just one sentence at the very end, but I don't think Rachel's proclamation that the rebellion will stand and be victorious was very appropriate for an organization that's going for subtly. Sure, they figured that you were a rebel, but why confirm it and prove them right? In the future, please keep in mind that rebels live on a diet of secrets and lies, at least until they are strong enough to make themselves known. Also, Rachel used Waffle Throw! The attack was not very effective...
Rank Points: 175 Your mission was to get some training from some more experienced rebels. Not to say that Daniel and Kishk didn't teach Rachel anything, but I think she learned a lot more from Kanoa and Dusk. She ended up with a lot more training than anyone was expecting. Hopefully, someone will teach her to be much more careful about what she says and who she says it to.

Participation: 3/3 You stayed for the whole RP!
Skill: 7/7 Like the others, you made good use of detail. Your character was interesting and her background was compelling. Her boss creeps me out. Seriously.
Battle: 1/5 The battle was short and disappointing, but it happened, so you get a point.
Total: 11/15
Other Notes: Why does Dusk sleep on a park bench? Can't she stay in the Magma barracks, or does she just not want to be there? With that creeper, Cole Hayman around, I guess I can understand.
Rank Points: 125 Same as Kamaitachi really. You two weren't exactly busting your butts to get your work done, but you completed the mission anyway.

Participation: 2/3 You vanished near the end.
Skill: 4/7 Your posts were rather short, and they lacked a lot of depth and detail. I felt like even after reading all of your posts, I still knew very little about what kind of person Daniel is. There was also some grammar errors, which detracted from your score. Try to keep your posts in the same tense, past tense preferably. Sometimes you switch between past and present tense, and this is very distracting and confusing.
Battle: 0/5 You didn't battle, so no battle points.
Total: 6/15
Other Notes: I like how Daniel seems to be the most sensible and responsible of the group. I wish he had played a bigger role in training Rachel, since I feel like he could have been a big help.
Rank Points: 50 Daniel's mission was to train Rachel in the ways of the rebels. Mostly, Daniel just escorted her and Kishk around the resort. The mission was completed and she did get some training, but not much from Daniel.

Participation: 1/3 She ran off to check out some hot guys and just never came back.
Skill: 6/7 Your posts were good. I enjoyed Megan's conflict with Dusk, and I appreciated that she was the only one who really cared about Team Magma or completing the mission. Keep an eye out for spelling and grammar errors. Read over your posts in order to catch the errors that spellcheck skips over. Adding more details could also greatly improve some of your posts.
Battle: 0/5 No battle, no battle points.
Total: 7/15
Other Notes: I really missed Megan, because I was looking forward to seeing how her character contributed to the story. She was unique, and by not getting along with everyone, she brought out more interesting traits in other characters that we may not normally see.
Rank Points: She didn't complete the mission, or even contribute to its completion, so I'm afraid she gets no rank points today.

[Rasu]

Well, I guess that this is the end of the road for Underwater Discoveries. The RP died down and, after months of waiting to see if someone came back, it's time to warp it up.

The cast;

• Aqua, Cavalcade: Benjamin Venefsukja – Progress Tracking – Profile
• Aqua, Darkrow: Fredda 'Pacis' Alcedonia – Progress Tracking – Profile
• Aqua, Vena Sera: Terrence 'Beat' Braunstein – Progress Tracking – Profile
• Aqua, Tekno: Khezu Moga – Progress Tracking – Profile
• Magma, Arkie: Lisey Hunter – Progress Tracking – Profile

Nothing of much interest happened other than Khezu and Lisey breaking down an entire submarine after pissing off a Gyarados.

[Amissa]

Underwater Discoveries has been graded! Sorry for the ridiculous wait time, and thanks for everyone's patience.

This RP was very well-written even though it was not complete. The Rp made good use of technology. I was pleased to see the Aqua submarines getting a bit of use (even though you guys were restricted to the itty bitty ones). The characters were delightful and engaging. I found myself wanting to go back and read some of your earlier RPs since they sounded like so much fun. It's too bad this one had to come to such a premature end, but that happens.

I'm afraid there's no rank points, since no one actually completed their missions.

Participation: 3/3 You stayed until the end
Skill: 7/7 You have some minor grammatical errors in your first post, but other than that your posts are a good length and interesting to read. Your character shows great leadership qualities, and you make good use of Ben's culture and language.
Battle: 0/5 Cause there was no battle
Total: 10/15
Comments: Bread makes you fat?!

Participation: 3/3 You stayed for the whole RP
Skill: 7/7 It's good to see someone with the courage to play a fat character, and you play her well. It's too bad that the Rp ended when it did. I was looking forward to reading more from this character.
Battle: 0/5 No battle
Total: 10/15
Comments: When first mentioning a pokemon by its name, try to add some description or at least what species of pokemon it is.

Participation: 3/3 You stayed for the whole RP
Skill: 7/7 You have some minor spelling errors in your first post, but otherwise your writing is all good.
Battle: 0/5 No battles
Total: 10/15
Comments: I love the bromance between Benjamin and Beat

Participation: 3/3 You stayed for the whole RP
Skill: 7/7 You did a great job of capturing my attention with your first post and producing an instantly likeable character.
Battle: 0/5 No battles
Total: 10/15
Comments: Good job!

Participation: 3/3 You stayed for the whole RP
Skill: 7/7 I was worried about how difficult it might be to play an undercover agent, but you do a mighty fine job. Lisey may have found her talent in sabotaging other factions.
Battle: 0/5 No battles
Total: 10/15
Comments: Were you and Tekno collaborating on posts? If so, good job. You both seem to work together well.

You may PM me if you have any complaints or notice any inaccuracies. Thanks again for being patient, and I really will try to be more prompt in the future.

[Kamaitachi]

Rebels, Rebels, Everywhere has died out due to two players dropping out. Boo!

The Rebellion:
Luna Cardelle - Ozzy - Progress Tracking
Regan Chamuel - Kamaitachi - Progress Tracking
Jened Tenkuu - Knil1 - Progress Tracking

Sadly, the roleplay never got fully underway. I don't think anyone met the minimum requirement of Ten Posts, but here it is anyway. I hope you enjoy!

[Master Houndoom]

Unfortunately, you are right. With 19 total posts, no one person made the 10 minimum posts needed for a grade. However, since you are still around and put in your best effort, I will award the 3 participation levels. Knil1, should he return, will get 1. Unfortunately Ozzy seemed to have been forced to leave earlier than you or Knil1, and to that I cannot in good conscience reward levels.

[Master Houndoom]

Evening the Odds is now complete!

A brash young Rebellion agent is teamed with a severe and inexperienced young woman for an important mission: retrieve the research behind the creation of so called poketools.it is a simple retrieval mission, easily handled, so long as they don't get in each other's way (three guesses what happens next. The first two don't count)

Meanwhile, Aqua agent Vincent is tasked with protecting that same documentation. Not one to trust in luck, he sets up elaborate yet effective defenses. Too bad Chance has other ideas!

Participants:
Olivia "Shiva" Prewitt ("Livvielovelollipop")
Casper "Ghost" Weard ("the great. That's important!)
Vincent Lance ("that guy with the icicle so far up his-" "That's enough, Mr. Weard.")

[Kamaitachi]

Oddening the Eves.

Um...I love Strings. 'Nuff said. Without further ado:

Your Grading:
First off, it was really fun getting to know all of these characters. I, sadly, have not read much Vincent Lance works, and it's my first introduction to both Olivia and Casper (or Shiva and Ghost?). A cast of three fairly diverse characters is always very fun.

Attendance: 3/3 Hooray!
Skill: 7/7 Olivia is a fascinating character. I've gotten so used to Branwys and Jaima that it's interesting to see a more down to earth character. She's simple and elegant, and is quite the pragmatist. This stark contrast to Casper made her stand out very much, and I also enjoy the POVs from Isra and Nyx. I, for some reason, giggled when they noted the Hive-Mind of the Litwick, seeing as Nyx, Isra and Olivia are on the border of that themselves.
Battle: 4/5
I wasn't quite sure what to do with this, as the battles on this part are almost glossed over. The brief battle with the Glameow was fun, but moreso as a dialogue than anything. The fight with the Litwicks appeared to be off-screen the entire time, with indication that a fight happened, then cutting to the results. I know they were there, and that maybe some time constraints may have forced you to cut out the detail. In any case, I still say good job. I'm glad that newb-trainer Olivia didn't go around Steamrolling everyone she met.

Total: 14/15

Faction Points: I'm new to this...so...125/175? Olivia's task was to retrieve data on Poketools. Well, they did a good job, received a commendation from Lloyd, and the tactics employed were very sneaky. But...Casper threw the disk in the fire. Seeing as Vincent wiped the main data, that means no one has that current generation of data. Yeah. That seems right.

Attendance: 3/3 Yahoo!
Skill: 7/7 As aforementioned, I pretty much love Strings. Casper annoyed me greatly, but that's probably because I've met many Caspers in my life. (I work as an actor, Caspers are a dime a dozen in that field.) Your writing, of course, is always enjoyable. Bonus points between you and MH making me reach for a dictionary every couple posts! I love good vocabularies, and both of you tend to find the exact correct words at all correct times.
Battle: 5/5 There was one real battle, but I think it was done rather nicely. There were only a few moves used, but your descriptions of them were perfect, especially considering that Casper never actually ordered a move out loud. Usually, through your description, I could tell which moves were used right before you named the technique, which is something I liked.

Total: 15/15

Faction Points: +125! I wanted to give Casper fewer faction points, mostly because Strings did a majority of the work for him. However, he did drag Vincent out, which was nice of him. Also, way to throw the objective into the fire.

Attendance: 3/3 (Even if he was unconscious for the final third of the roleplay
Skill: 6/7 I get really, really annoyed when I see "their" instead of "they're", because it really throws me off. These are things that spellcheck doesn't catch, so a quick re-read of your posts would serve you well. Normally, I wouldn't dock a point, but I feel like there were quite a few of these. Other than that, your posts were quite good. (Also, Vincent being a daddy at 19/20 scares me. Nothing personal, I just think it's far too young to be having kids.)
Battle: 4/5 Varied moves, but I feel that there could definitely have been more description in them. In your posts, I had a really hard time understanding just how many Litwick there actually were, and also if the 'boss' pokemon was a Lampent or a Chandelure. Even then, I'm not quite sure what became of it.

Total: 13/15

Faction Points: +100 You were supposed to guard the warehouse and keep the rebels from gaining the data. You guarded the warehouse, but the only reason the rebels didn't get the data was because Casper offhandedly threw it away. Then the warehouse you were guarding (presumably) burned to the ground.

[Kamaitachi]

Um....I'm gonna double post. Yay!

The Showdown at Shady Acres

The Stuff Happens HERE!

Cast:
Team Magma:
1.) Kanoa Kaipo - Progress Tracking (Levels Pending latest RP Grading)
2.) Abraham West - Current Levels
3.) Ares Zarrenler - Current levels

Rebellion:
1.) Rachel Lore, and her Progress Tracking
2.) Daniel Reeves - Progress Tracking

Aqua:
1.) Mayim Psy - Progress Tracking!

Synopsis:
A unit composed of Kanoa Kaipo, Ares Zerrenler, and Abraham West are formed to be a Magma Street Team. It's their given job to put up Magma flyers and flags around a territory of choice, as part of a "Manifest Destiny" Campaign. The ulterior motive is to draw dissenters out of hiding and rout them, asserting Magma dominance.

In a counter-unit, Daniel Reeves and Rachel Lore are summoned from the Rebellion side to face this, and along the way team up with ragamuffin Mayim Psy.

Daniel quickly engages Kanoa in battle, but it's inconclusive. Rachel steps in to fight as well. Kanoa, with the aid from Ares' Houndour, Volgen, engages her as well, and proceeds to triumph. Rachel, sans backup from Daniel or Mayim is forced to flee the scene.

Meanwhile, Abraham routed some remaining dissenters, and put into effect a brilliant plan to make the Magma front appear less tyrannical, winning popular support in Shady Acres as well.

Major Event: Shady Acres is now a Magma Controlled Territory!
Minor Events: Kanoa catches a Shiny Petilil. Ares catches a Bronzor, and Abraham receives a Shellder. Rachel is believed to be a Magma agent by an outside source.

Thank you in advance!

[Master Houndoom]

First, I'm sorry that this took so long. Hectic weeks are hectic.

Secondly, I want to say well done by all. Not one character lost my interest (until that is, they were no longer there to hold it) and some good storytelling was done in the meantime. I enjoyed the interaction, or lack thereof, especially by the Magma Team, who worked well together despite hardly being compatible. I agree with Kamai's posting above: Abraham's gambit at the end was brilliant.

I would like all of you to watch the spelling and grammar, and, just as importantly, watch the parenthesis. Not the double parenthesis where yo indicate yo are speaking OOC, but the standard ones. A few times I noticed that they commented on actions or thoughts the character couldn't have had. It's very jarring and a bit of a pet peeve of mine (even when I do it myself >< )

I apologize for the lack of individual comment. You were all very good, but unfortunately the nature of my problems makes in depth analysis a bit of a rocky path. As such, I give the levels you deserve.

Ares Zalbag Zorblorg Zorenlar Z: 15/15 levels, 125 Rank Points
Konoa Kitae: 15/15 levels, 130 Rank Points (the extra five is for leadership!)
Abraham West: 15/15 levels, 175 Rank Points (due to the brilliant idea of making the people believe the conflict was a game)

Rachel Lore: 15/15 levels, 100 rank points (You went in, you tried, and it's the Rebellion. AND you had to do it with your partner gone...)

Daniel and Mayim, it was a good start, but unfortunately you left in the middle. As such, I am ONLY rewarding 2/15 of the participation points. If you come back, and I hope you do, I would like to see you stick with a roleplay. I think the loss of most of the points for this one is a good incentive for sticking out another.

[Toogee]

So Operation Nemesis is finally wrapped up.

Starring:

Rachel Burke- Moonlight Zelda
Ichiro Hatori- Toogee
Seymour Tomaski- Bogart

Rachel attempts to infiltrate an Aqua warehouse to find the whereabouts of her missing sister. She runs into Rebel initiate Ichiro, who's on a mission to figure what was going on with all the fighting around the warehouse. The spying eventually led to infiltration as Rachel delved into paper documents. Unfortunately, the Aquas caught up to them. Ichiro was able to stall with some deception as well as a brief pokemon battle, enough to allow the Magmas to confront the "blueberries". A stray attack put a halt to the two's getaway. Rachel was taken by the Magmas, who would no doubt figure out her true identity. Ichiro was taken by his own pokemon and togeter they make it back to the base. The aspiring ninja faces his first setback on his very first mission, hoping Rachel gets out alright.

Other Stuff:

Ichiro caught a ditto!

I think that was it. >_>

[Umbrae Calamitas]

Grading for Operation: Nemesis

It's too bad this RP wasn't longer than it was, since all of the posts are well-written and the character dynamics are fun to read. Comments for each member individually. If you have any questions or concerns, please contact myself or Master Houndoom.

You were present for the whole RP and your posts were not skimpy in the least.
Participation: 3/3

You're a very good writer and this is seen clearly in your posts. You describe things well (what comes to mind quickest is your initial post and the lovely description of Epona's gait upon the cement), there are very few mistakes, and your posts are always a joy to read.
Skill: 7/7

The only time that your pokemon actually battled (Gau, the pidgey, specifically) was when Toogee was bunnying you, and the battle between the pidgey and the zubat was not very long at all. This means that I cannot award you full points. This is especially unfortunate since your pokemon were quite active in performing actions that helped the infiltration process, but this was still not a battle.
Battle: 2/5

Total: 12/15

Rank: No rank points, as she's a boring old civilian. :P

You were present for the whole RP and your posts were not skimpy in the least. 'specially that last big, nasty one.
Participation: 3/3

You're a very good writer and this is seen clearly in your posts. You describe things well, there are very few mistakes, and your posts are always a riot to read. Your characters have an incredibly fun dynamic between them. I especially love the banter between Dexter and Ichiro (and Dexter in general, since he's a snarking coward of an abra). The end of the last post, with the reflection on Rachel's fate, was also a lovely touch for Ichiro's character, especially since, despite being a ninja-in-training, :P I found his character ridiculously annoying. Which is sometimes pretty cool. But buy that boy a thesaurus so he learns a few words other than "awesome!"
Skill: 7/7

While you had some more battle-time in than Moonlight Zelda, and the battles you had were posted by yourself, there still wasn't a whole lot to go with. In fact, most of the time, Ichiro's pokemon ran off on him! Which, by the way, was hilarious and I'd give you another skill point if I could. Alas!
Battle: 4/5

Total: 14/15
Rank: 175/175 Despite what General says, Ichiro did do as he was bid and got the information his mission required, so he successfully completed his mission.

No points awarded. You only had one post in the RP, and your character has also been purged from the system.

[Kamaitachi]

Annoyed with the lack of activity, I wrapped up the roleplay, therefore:

Trouble at Trivianni is complete.

Cast List:

The Rebellion:
Dr. Regan Chamuel - Track this progress, yo.
Alexis Rosset - Progress Tracking

Team Aqua:
Khezu Moga - Progress Tracking

Synopsis:
With a noticeable increase of Magma activity in the Trivianni zone, Regan Chamuel and Alexis Rosset are dispatched to help remove some of the Magma influence there. They easily dispatch of two Magma agents by some trickery, but then are confronted with two more. A battle rages, and Aqua Agent Khezu Moga joins the fray. However, the battle is difficult, and in the end, they're saved by the Deus Ex Machina of an undercover Rebel Agent. Regan and Alexis are sent back to base, as they've done all they could, and the rebels evidently don't wish for their identities to be compromised.

Post Count:
Regan: 11
Alexis: 9
Khezu: 5

[Umbrae Calamitas]

Grading for Trouble at Trivianni

I enjoyed reading this roleplay, especially because of the different types of characters involved in it. It's always fun to watch people meet for the first time and see how they'll interact with each other. The biggest disappointment in this RP was the unfortunate abruptity of the ending. You warned me about the Deus ex Machina at the ending, but it still seemed to come to a very sudden halt. Kind of like being thrown off a cliff, falling through a storm, through wind, sleet, and freezing rain, and then hitting the ground. Yeah... bit like that.

Also, I might hope to see your Deus ex Machina again in the future, if you've a mind to make him a recurring character, if for a different reason. If it was just a way to end the RP, well then, it was interesting.

You were present for the entirety of the RP and had the most posts overall.
Participation: 3/3

I truly enjoy Regan's character. She has a far different perspective of the world than the people around her, because of her maturity, as well as the fact that she is/was a doctor. One of the best aspects about her, or most interesting, to be more precise, is that she has a lot of experience because of her age, but due to being a doctor and her own choices, has a great deal less experience than most others that she deals with when it comes to pokemon battling. The care she has for all pokemon, including those of her opponents, is also very interesting to see.

I will also note that the sheer number of times her age is brought into the mix is hilarious, insulting, and overdone (and you may hear all three of these adjectives uttered with a laugh in them). In the end, between your posts and the posts of the others in regard to Regan's age, it comes across as being a joke to mention her age as much as possible, which makes it funnier still. (I'd be careful not to overdo it to make it way too much, as then it could become an old joke long past funny.) This will be a careful balancing act, but whether on purpose or accidental, it had me chuckling and groaning simultaneously at each incident I came across.
Skill: 7/7

Lots of battling, and it was equally split up between seeing the pokemon battling, as well as seeing Regan interacting with her pokemon or watching the goings-on of the battle.
Battle: 5/5

Total: 15/15

Rank: 175/175 Despite nearly getting caught out, you did your duty in the end, so full rank points to you.

You remained for the entirety of the RP, so full points.
Participation: 3/3

I really enjoy Alexis' character. Part of his amusement is his name and the expectations therein. I make a habit of not reading the profile of a character until after I've read the RP, so as to not ruin any interesting things revealed in their own time in an RP that I might ruin when reading a profile. Alexis is a name I expect to connotate a girl, so it's an interesting twist to find it's the name of a male character, and to have my reaction as well as the reaction of the other characters. Alexis' pokemon were fun to watch due to their interactions with one another, and it was amusing to watch him try and just follow the good doctor through the mission instead of piddling around with an anagram. I greatly enjoyed the differences between Alexis and Regan.
Skill: 7/7

Lots of battle times to play around with, and the battles were well done, as well.
Battle: 5/5

Total: 15/15

Rank: 175/175 As above, the mission was completed successfully, so full rank points, despite the Deus ex Machina.

Unfortunately, your posts made up for only a fifth of the total RP, so I can't give you full points for that.
Participation: 2/3

Khezu's character was interesting, though his pokemon are even more memorable - particularly the aspects of comedy that they brought to the RP. Double S was very funny in his excitable nature, given the juxtaposition of Tank not really being bothered by anything. It was a little disappointing, in the end, to not know what happens to Khezu, since he's not with the other two and was actually spying on them in the beginning. It would have been nice to have a follow-up post saying what he was going to do, since the other two were headed back to their base, or how he got away from them without giving a huge explanation about what he was doing there in the first place or who he worked for, as he's not on the same side. The fact that you weren't around for very much of the RP also loses you points.
Skill: 4/7

Khezu and his pokemon did battle, like the others, so full points there.
Battle: 5/5

Total: 11/15

Rank: 175/175 Even though Slinger Shot caused tons of problems by dropping Tank's pokeball , Khezu still got the information he needed to and didn't lose or destroy the camera-bow in battle, so I'd say he gets full rank points.

*point counter exploded*

[Master Houndoom]

A month after Sagira Smythe's kidnapping, the rest of her team, The Pack, continues to search for her. Bureaucracy is beginning to demand that business come back as usual, or, worse, that the entirety of Sector B conform to certain standards. Ivy Kylarian and Jay Lange must battle this oppression and the heartache of missing their respective sister and lover, and perform their first mission since the loss of one of their own.

What does one call moving on without recovering?

How does what was once a whole and healthy organism go on when it has Missing Pieces?

[Umbrae Calamitas]

Grading for Missing Pieces: where puking = evolution

I loved this RP; waiting for each new post to come out was a personal hell, I promise you, but it was always well-worth the wait, because I didn't know what was coming. The interactions between the characters were a lot of fun, particularly where certain pokemon were concerned, but it's also great to see how more than just the main characters are reacting to loss.

Obviously, you were here for the whole thing. Wouldn't've been much of an RP if not.No offense, Arrow.
Participation: 3/3

Jay's character has a lot of depth. He was a pretty boy heartbreaker well-known for his parents, and somewhat his own stunt career, who has changed a lot over the years. Now, he's faced up against The Aide, the kind of guy he's probably pretty well used to dealing with, and the manner with which he deals with it - passive agressive, like - is both saddening (his depression) and inspiring (his sneakiness). It's clear he's not down for the count, but also clear that he is hurting, and you show this very well.

More than just that, I really loved the interactions between the characters. Jay and Ivy was a particularly prominent one, but also Jay and Bryce. One of my personal favorite instances to see, however, are the ones in which Cammy and Jay are communicating, because they are precisely what the other needs at the moment. One of the best thing about your writing is, no matter the genre of the particular piece, you always manage to interject a little humor here and there. It's never out of place, but manages to break up the despondency to keep Uprising: The Pack from becoming a well-loathed soap opera.
Skill: 7/7

Unfortunately, because there was no actual battle, I can't give you full battle points. There were instances of stealthy tactics involving the pokemon's and Jay's athletic abilities, as well as the attacking while running aspect, so you do get some point.
Battle: 2/5

Total: 12/15

Rank: 175/175 - Their mission was to see what was up with the pretzel shop, and they were successful, so full rank points.

Obviously, you were here for the whole thing. Would've been a really boring RP if you weren't, no offense to Master Houndoom.
Participation: 3/3

Ivy also has a lot of depth. She's had a rough life so far, growing up on the streets and living like a pokemon, fighting for territory, food, and any other necessities. Losing her poke-mom caused her a lot of pain and also built up a need for vengeance in her, and then she had to deal with the drugs and the detox and rehab. Now, she's lost someone close to her and is trying to deal with that pain while finding a place in a world that wants her but she doesn't feel quite fits - like a new pair of shoes, not broken in, yet.

Ivy is both aggravating and a lot of fun to watch. She's aggravating because I want to put her on a diet before she turns into a puddle of gravy and gets washed down the drain, but I really love her character. She's constantly dancing between the pokemon and human realm, and while it can be troublesome when dealing with certain types of people when her instincts just want her to rip their face off and clamp teeth around their jugular, it can be a boon when on a mission. It's also a lot of fun to see her interactions with her pokemon (always interesting) and with Gray Man, especially since she has no idea what he's actually feeling. Her knowledge about the way the pokemon mind works in regards to the Rule of the Jungle, so to speak, is also fascinating and fun to see narrated.
Skill: 7/7

Unfortunately, because there was no actual battle, I can't give you full battle points. There were instances of stealthy tactics involving the pokemon's and Ivy's athletic abilities, as well as the attacking while running aspect, so you do get some point.
Battle: 2/5

Total: 12/15

Rank: 175/175 - Their mission was to see what was up with the pretzel shop, and they were successful, so full rank points.

[Master Houndoom]

The Rebellion must be hard up for agents. They keep calling Olivia Prewitt, an ordinary office worker, in for missions.

They keep sending Casper Weard, also known as Ghost, on missions as well, despite his irreverent attitude and seeming incompetence.

They keep putting them TOGETHER.

This time, it was a mission to meet with a Magma agent, Marcia Price, and retrieve a package that she was to sell to Aqua. A package that, if Magma was giving it to their worst enemy, must be valuable. A package that the Rebellion HAD to have.

Which, when you think about it, means they should have sent someone else...

[Kamaitachi]

Putting on Masks is complete!

A fun read is an enjoyable read. I liked the interaction between the three distinct personalities, as well as the numerous obstacles to the Rebellion side of the mission. Without further ado:

Participation: 3/3
Skill: I love your writing as usual. Casper, as usual, annoyed me right up until the part where he appeared human, which made me go: "Oh?" out loud. This is both in his revealed story, as well as his interactions with Olivia. The changes are subtle, but I like where his character is going. It'll be interesting to see how he develops.

As always, I enjoy Strings' inner monologue, so I'm happy I got to see it. 7/7

Battle: Isra had it right when she pointed out that Casper's pokemon were a 'marvel to behold'. I really enjoyed the hectic melee in the kitchen. It was understandably cut short, but done in a rather cinematic way. 5/5

Total: 15/15

Faction Rank Points: Rebellion: 125 You succeeded in getting the package...but you didn't. I suppose if Casper were Magma, you'd get the full 175, right?

Participation: 3/3
Skill: You're an enjoyable writer, as always. Very few mistakes, and it's still lovely to see Olivia's very grounded reactions to Caspers more wacky antics. It's also nice to see that while she's not yet used to working with Casper, she's getting accustomed to his personality. (That also means she knows precisely how to counter him before he even begins, which is nice to see.) I wanted to give you bonus points for slipping something naughty under the radar, but I don't think I can do that. 7/7
Battle: Even with so few moves at your disposal, it was nice to see Isra and Nyx in battle. Well, moreso Isra, as Nyx is more of the special supporter, right? I wanted to give you a bonus point here for the Dominic Deegan reference, but alas. 5/5

Faction Points: 125. Same as Casper's. You got the package, but then promptly lost it. I think Olivia and Casper are fated to work hard without ever 'successfully' completing a mission.

Participation: You only had 9 posts, and I think you disappeared at the end. At least, you didn't quite wrap up like your partners...so...2/3.

Skill: Marcia's an interesting character who seems to be motivated only by her own desires and interests. I can see her getting into more problems in Magma, given her rather brash personality. I'm confused, though, as to her boldness at singling Olivia out and basically announcing to a restaurant that she's making a clandestine deal, amongst other things. Also, it's a pet peeve of mine that you'd mispell "Togepi" throughout the entire roleplay. Watch your spelling, and watch your grammar. You have a penchant for incomplete sentences. Just make sure you double check before you post. Don't worry, I forgot to do so all the time, too, but it still really helps. 5/7

Battle: Only one short battle to capture Nidora. Nice work with Metronome, but I was a bit confused about Nidora's easy acceptance to capture. 2/5

Faction Points: Your mission was to sell the package...and...you did that, so... 150 points. (Yep, even though Marcia tried to reap some personal profit from it. I hope she's paying off those credit cards!)

[Protoman]

Reciting the Past is now finished and ready for grading.

After two years Richie Palmer decides to take a mission to find and bring ex-Rebel Gregory Ramirez in for questioning. Unfortunately, Richie becomes sidetracked by the ever eager Sera Taisa being in need of a tour of Noverus. Why does she keep reminding him of Violet?

Post Count:
Protoman: 20
rt117: 20 (including topic post)