[X] My Assistant

[PrincessTikal]

silverleaf: There's like no good online spellcheckers. I couldn't find you a good one. Do you have Microsoft Word or a FanFiction.net account? Both have spellcheckers, but Word is a lot better since it'll help with grammar as well.

Otherwise I would suggest downloading FireFox. I recently moved from Internet Explorer to FireFox and I'm a happy camper now.

If you don't want to download anything, use Word if you have it or set up a FanFiction.net account. If you need any more help with that, please ask. I want to help you.

Other than that, I expect full capitalized sentences and words that make sense.

This post has been edited by PrincessTikal: Jan 9 2010, 08:15 PM

[Akiiko]

i carnt download anythink couse its my mums laptop but im useing Lakora region as a spell checker..but can i rp ? and i think i spelled anuff wrong that Lakoria didnt know what it was (as if iv had anuff or how you spell it) but i should be spelling things right now

[PrincessTikal]

Your mom doesn't have Microsoft Word on her laptop? Ask her if she has some sort of program like that on her computer like if she ever wanted to write some documents.

Being part Grammar Nazi, I must have perfection.

[Akiiko]

no..my mums got all that...just been spazzing a bit..but im fine useing lakoria region <3 but can i rp?

[PrincessTikal]

Before you can join the RP, show me an RP post with proper grammar used with your program. It can be any old RP post...just edited with proper grammar. If it comes up to my standards, you can join the RP. Just post it here when you're done.

All Members: New Rule added. If you and another RP'er are looking at the RP at the same time, planning to post, make sure you refresh the page first to check if the other person(s) has posted before you. Sometimes their post will mess up things in your own post, confusing the storyline. If you already posted it by then, just edit it to make it fit what just happened.

This post has been edited by PrincessTikal: Jan 9 2010, 09:30 PM

[Akiiko]

ok

Blade was on top of a Cliff watching the whole land like he was some kind of guardian. he let the wind blow his leaf and wings as a tear came "why do i have these memorys....they haunt me....but are they true...or someones doing?" he asked as if he was talking to the wind "and why have i got these wings?..." he sighed sitting back down and sweat-dropping "what am i doing asking the wind? it dosnt understand me " he starts laughing.

This post has been edited by silverleaf: Jan 9 2010, 09:14 PM

[PrincessTikal]

Blade was on top of a cliff watching the whole land like he was some kind of guardian. He let the wind blow his leaf and wings as a tear came. "Why do I have these memories....they haunt me....but are they true...or someone's doing?" he asked as if he was talking to the wind. "And why do I have these wings...?" he sighed sitting back down and sweat-dropping. "What am I doing asking the wind? It doesn't understand me," he starts laughing.

Review the corrections compared to your original post. A little too many there. ^^; Try another RP sample, paying attention to the ones I've pointed out here. You must have acceptable grammar before you can RP here. You do have an English class, don't you?

This post has been edited by PrincessTikal: Jan 9 2010, 09:24 PM

[Akiiko]

ya i do

(thinks of another one)

A fight could be heard from within the forest. Blade was fighting a Team Rocket Chimchar and a Team Rocket Pikachu. "You both will never beat me" Blade shouted as he used Leaf Blade on them both "You both might have the upper hand but i got the speed" Blade then used a Leaf Storm on the Team Rocket Pokemon before he ran for his life,knowing more would be coming "I just got to run faster".

how about that one?

This post has been edited by silverleaf: Jan 9 2010, 09:44 PM

[PrincessTikal]

A fight could be heard from within the forest. Blade was fighting a Team Rocket Chimchar and a Team Rocket Pikachu. "You both will never beat me," Blade shouted as he used Leaf Blade on them both."You both might have the upper hand but I got the speed." Blade then used a Leaf Storm on the Team Rocket Pokemon before he ran for his life,(space)knowing more would be coming. "I just got to run faster."

Slightly better. Remember to capitalize your i's whenever they stand alone. Like "I wish I was a Pokemon." rather than "i wish i was a Pokemon."

When someone speaks, put a comma like this:
"I love Pokemon," he said.
Instead of:
"I love Pokemon" he said.

When you go from an action to someone talking, it should be like this:
He began to run away, fearing for his life. "Leave me alone!" he shouted. (<- "He" doesn't need to be caps because it's referring to what he is shouting. If it's like "Leave me alone!" He then kicked a bucket out of his way. (it needs to be capitalized then))
Instead of:
He began to run away, fearing for his life "Leave me alone!" he shouted.
^Notice the lack of a period.

ONE more good example and I'll let you in. Just make sure to keep up the good grammar. If I see it slip, I'll be reminding/telling you to fix it. If it doesn't improve after I tell you to fix it, you will have to be kicked out of the RP and Blade will have to suffer the consequence of death.

This post has been edited by PrincessTikal: Jan 10 2010, 01:16 PM

[Akiiko]

"The sea seemed so calm,So still,So why do i get a uneasy feeling about it?" Blade asked as he looked out to sea "Its like forgotten Memories are in there" Blade sighs "Ill find out one day,But not today" he looks one more time at the calming sea before running off.

ok

[PrincessTikal]

"The sea seemed so calm,(space)so still,(space)so why do I get an uneasy feeling about it?" Blade asked as he looked out to sea. "It's like forgotten memories are in there," Blade sighs. "I'll find out one day,(space)but not today." He looks one more time at the calming sea before running off.

Remember to put a space after commas, capitalize your I's and add periods and apostrophes like above. You don't need to capitalize words after a comma; it's only needed after periods. Add periods and commas before talking like above.

Put apostrophes in words like don't, I'll, it's and so on. Especially in a word like I'll, which without the apostrophe spells ill, like if you were sick than what you are going to do.

Review the mistakes here carefully and remember how to fix your errors and then I'll give you permission to join the RP. I would at least read/skim over what has already gone through so you know the whole setting/situation.

[Count Bleck]

This looks epic....
Username: Count Bleck
Name: Dist
Gender:male
Pokemon:Absol
Personality: [finaly! an Rp where I can split personalities again!]Dist is a queit creepy person at first sight.He loves battles,has an awkward-who- is-this-guy aura[like a banette smiling at you from a dark ally]He's a great person to hang around though,and always[Curse Ike for this!]fight for his freinds.

However,Atropos has a different type of person.His lust for battles increases to the point of bloodslughter.Just the thought of blood makes him shudder in delight.He almost always smiling,andwill do anything to get in a fight

Bio:Dist was born the day of the apacolpyse.Dist was just beginning to explore the new world when the Visoin of the End came.All pokemon with visoinary powers were afflicted by it,but becuase Dist was a new born,he couldn't resist the dark effects it had.Since then he has been a wanderer,searching for away to defeat Arceus and end his reign of terror.
Extra: The dark effect of the Vison of the End caused him to have an alter ego,selfed named Atropos.He appears when Dist is thrown himself into a rage,or when Dist needs his strength.The difference between the two is that Dist will turn to a shiny pokemon,His eyes blood red. and ready to pounce on anything.

[PrincessTikal]

CountBleck: Accepted. Don't worry, I fight for my friends too. :P Go and and hop in the RP whenever you want to. Try skimming over at least the first page to get the scenery and if you want, I can give you the summary of what happened so far. Remember to keep up on grammar in the RP.
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New Rule: I'm giving you all you guys some more freedom and can create NPC characters we could interact with. (example: Strike the Scyther) They don't need a bio or anything...they are just temporary characters we could meet along the way. Hell, go ahead and use one of your other RP characters if you want. I think it would be fun to squeeze in your other RP characters as cameo appearances if you want. But remember: they won't be traveling with us, at least not for too long.) Just remember to NOT abuse this privilege or it will be taken away from you.

This post has been edited by PrincessTikal: Jan 12 2010, 05:01 PM

[Serend]

May I join?

Username: Gallade3
Name: Blade
Gender: Male
Pokemon: Gallade
Personality: Blade isn't much of a very social character, but he loves to be with his friends. Although he can be a little shy sometimes, he usually doesn't chicken out.
Bio: Blade used to be a small ralts. His mother was a Frosslass and his father was also a Gallade. Strangely, he never evolved into a Kirlia, but straight into a Gallade. Nobody knows why. During the Apocalypse, his parents died. Enraged with anger, Blade set off to find Arceus and destroy him for revenge.
Extra: Blade is navy blue where normal Gallades are green, and the top of his head is a deep red.

approves.

Edit: Blade is NOT a shiny.

This post has been edited by Gallade3: Jan 12 2010, 11:27 PM

[PrincessTikal]

Gallade3: Wouldn't have your Gallade a blueish tint almost be like being a shiny? As the rules say, there shall be no shinies.

Other than that concern, I don't see anything else wrong with your post.

This post has been edited by PrincessTikal: Jan 12 2010, 05:06 PM

[aurorabeam]

Username: VayVayVaporeon
Name: Lazuli
Gender: Female
Pokemon: Vaporeon
Personality: Very calm and deep...though she usually has a positive attitude towards things. Very mature.
Bio: Used to be owned by a girl in high school that was very 'preppy' and a bit spoiled. When the apocalypse hit, Lazuli was released because her previous owner knew that it was either living in a pokeball for the rest of her life or being released yet it wasn't very safe. She was named by her previous owner 'Lazuli' after the blue gem. She never really 'bonded' with her previous trainer because of their very different personalities and maturity levels
Extra: She tends to zone out a lot...

[PrincessTikal]

Vayvayvaporeon: My dearest cousin, you are accepted into mah RP. Enjoy yourself

[Valstrax]

This looks interesting........

Username: Arceus2012.
Name: Ivory.
Gender: Female.
Pokemon: Ivysaur.
Personality: Ivory is a people Pokemon, basically she loves hanging out and talking with people, and also she is very jumpy and excited usually, though she's serious when the situation calls for it. She bonds easily with people she interacts with, and can be seen as all-around friendly. She doesn't curse and doesn't use violence but she can stand to hear people cursing or being violent as long as they don't go extreme, as she will give attacking Pokemon a fierce beat-up.
Bio: When she was a small Bulbasaur, she was gifted to a Trainer as a starter. However, she was accused of stealing a Leaf Stone from her Trainer and was released into the wild, where she was forced to learn how to protect herself against many enemies in the continual search for more Berries to live off of. She learned many defensive techniques (including how to use an enemy's attack against them) and offensive techniques during this time and eventually evolved into an Ivysaur. Now, Ivory is forced to evade the destruction while hiding from Arceus. She has had to steel herself to do such things as steal from people in order to survive. Ivory is going insane with the corruption Arceus is causing and believes that if there was some way to keep Arceus from using its power for a little while she could persuade it to listen to reason, unfortunately, she has no idea how that would be done.
Extra: ivory is lightly blue colored instead of green, and her bud is dark red instead of pink, also, she has longer vines than other Ivysaurs, meaning she can use a longer ranged Vine Whip.

Please accept me, this RP looks like a bunch of fun!

[PrincessTikal]

Arceus2012: Accepted. Keep up the good grammar. Just ask and I can send you an overall summary of what has happened so far in the RP so you don't get lost.

[Flynt]

I realize that the quality of my posts has been decreasing lately. I am doing my best to fix this proplem, and I am very sorry for it...